MY NeW sToRY

موضوع: MY NeW sToRY الثلاثاء يونيو 09, 2009 6:12 pm

hey guys what's up

i wrote a new story
it's not much so dont laugh

it's not done yet but i wanted to share it with all of u

i'm now on page 5

guys i'll say it again PLEASE DONT LAUGH

oh and i'm not very good at english so if i made any mistake please tell me

here goes nothing

Once upon a time there was a magical place called orathan the orathanian people are animal-like humans (you know like the furry anime people)
and the land of orathan is devided into two sides. there's the bright side and the dark side
and those two sides are always in a war aguenset each other. but the one thing that they both share that they all have magic powers. and because they look differant and use magic orathanians are often called demons. our story is about a half human-half orathanian boy named oradarx.oradarx is a handsome twelve years old boy.ans like all orathanians oradaarx have a black panther's ears,tail,and some clows.but the most importent thing is he also has magic powers.and because of his human side the orathanians rejected him and because of his orathanian side the humens feard him.so he decided to hide his true identity from all the humens.so he made spells and potions so he can look like a human and he changed his name to edward hoping that one day he'll meet someone who will see him as a human not a demon.

and because of his orathanian side is from the dark side. the brith side's empress rang cursed him and gave him a weak heart so he cant use dark magic aguenst the bright empire because many orathanians know about oradarx.they know that he has a tranquil soul, but carries a destiny that one day his heart shall be tainted by evil.

Eward wake up!. that was the sound of shaun edward's chiledhood friend
ed:what do you want
shaun:you should pay more attention in history class
ed:i only took this class so i can sleep and with a teacher like mr.nick i dont have to worry about it since he's so boring and all.

? mr.edward you do realize that i'm right behined you do you

edwards turnes around and fined mr.nick the history teacher and just when edward tries to explane to the teacher what did he just said the school bell ringed declearing the end of the school day.saved by the bell.said edward

so edward got back to his mansion.there was his little brother adem who is three years old and his twin sister alexess who is also twelve

alex:hey how's school today?did anything interesting happend
no said edward you know same classes same teachers nothing new
alex:so i've picked the perfect day to skip school oh i almost forgot you know that guy who works for the knig? you know that bold skinny massenger guy
?ed:you mean ping
alex:that's the guy
?ed: waht about him
he came here and gave me this litter and said it's for you from the king and said something aguenset the demon of tamirat
.ed: i see
alex: dont go
you know what happend the last time the tamirats attaked you lost your right eye
ed:you dont know everything
alex: i know that you were wearing that eyepach since we were five
ed: i have to after our father just disapeard now i'm the head of the dateh family so you have to understand alexess i have reponsibilitys towards my family and my country
?alex said crying:you just cant go did you forget about your heart
ed:that's enough alex you're giving me a headache
.alex:fine go and kill yourself see if i care
alex went to her room crying and then adem looked at edward and said: are you leaving ed
ed:yes

can i go with you? said adem so innoscently
ed:no you cant but i tell you what i'll get you something nice when i get back but you have to promise me to be good ok

ademk brother i promise i'll be good

in that moment edward looked at adem's eyes and envyd him for being so unawear of the real world and swore that no matter what he'll protect and will give him the life that he never had.then edward turned around calling his sevant
ed: khajori get ready we're leaving for war

well that's the end of part one i hope you like it

but please dont just read it and leave you have to write something